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Shadow Leader - ex-Student  |
In my new stories Chirstians, Musims ,and Jews have been united via the Abrahamic Alliance for 1045 years. 2025-3080- they've been fighting a common enemy: 666, and a number of smaller factions. I will at some point edit or use parts of the first the story I submitted to the JA: Cybernetic Hunters: Phoneix Of Evil, and submit to the JA. _______________ LJA This post was edited by Shadow Leader on May 01 2008 12:35am. |
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Gil-Galad - Student 
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Ye make sure they stay seperate from the heathen polytheists.
Theres your answer R2, polytheists get respect. Still going to BURN IN HELL FOR ALL ETERNITY mind, so not much compensation I spose. _______________ |JAA| since 02/05/06 Green for life |
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Shadow Leader - Ex-Student 
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the polytheistic religons are allied with the Abrahamic Alliance, but since they worship many gods, they are seperate, however they are given respect. _______________ LJA |
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R2D2 - Staff 
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Sounds so-so.
You know what would pep the whole thing up? *SNIP* ... epic ... Oh btw @ artex, non abrahamic definitely equals devil worship. Going to hell ggnore. Apparently, only monotheistic religions are not evil? _______________ "Do or do not, there is no try" Jedi Master Yoda Dual Saberist |
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Gil-Galad - Student 
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Quote: Sounds so-so.
You know what would pep the whole thing up? *SNIP* ... epic ... Oh btw @ artex, non abrahamic definitely equals devil worship. Going to hell ggnore. _______________ |JAA| since 02/05/06 Green for life This comment was edited by Gil-Galad on May 02 2008 10:18am. |
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Artex - Student 
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k no hindus? thats how it is? im suing once this book is released. _______________ Sluglife |
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Shadow Leader - Ex-Student
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Quote: How non-Christian of you, YOU FILTHY INFIDEL HEATHEN
Are you a christian? _______________ LJA This comment was edited by Shadow Leader on May 02 2008 04:01am. |
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Shadow Leader - Ex-Student 
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Even better, Taav or one of his subordinates betrays the G.S.S. ... I know what I''m going to do but that plot line is top secret, and also their could be some "corrupted" spies the G.S.S. causing trouble and dicent. _______________ LJA |
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Komence - Student 
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How non-Christian of you, YOU FILTHY INFIDEL HEATHEN This comment was edited by Komence on May 02 2008 01:27am. |
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Masta - Jedi Council 
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Sounds so-so.
You know what would pep the whole thing up? You should make an absolutely epic plot-twist right about in the middle of the play, where taav, by being contacted by the 666's and encouraged to look into certain stuff or whatever, finds out that the abrahamic is only an illusionary forefront for a deeply evil, draconian and demonic secret group that wants to transform the whole universe into somesort of hellish place, enslaving everyone in the process, by means of the evocation of the personification of violence and evil, that is, somesort of super evil deity, which is actually unknowingly being fed energy by the deluded abrahamic followers, who unknowingly pray and make sacrifices to -him- rather than to their own mythical gods. The only thing preventing the secret draconians from making their evil deity manifest itself in the universe and bring about eternal enslavement etc, is the very presence of the second coming of the messiah who is part of the 666 group, fighting to overthrow the evil guys and banish their devilish deity forever. That is also the primary reason why the secret government heavily brainwashed the confused population into believing that the 666's are actually an evil group and need to be absolutely eradicated from the face of the universe - that is, in order to get rid of the incarnation of jesus christ which is part of the group, and thus be able to set their demonic plans into motion. Taav, after recognizing this and almost suffering a breakdown, would probably switch sides, leaving the marines to join the -actually- good guys, assisting jesus2 etc. Oh yeah, in an utmost dramatic scene which would potentially make everyone cry, you could make taav confront his former friends and colleagues, trying to persuade them to join and believe in the Holy Truth, but unfortunately utterly failing to do so and therefore having no choice but to blow their whole ship up or whatever, killing them all in the process. Man, that'd be one kickass story. Oh! At the very end, after having defeated all the bad, evil, draconian, abrahamic leader guys, taav recognizes his own extremely profound misunderstanding of the bible and what the 'salvation' which the second coming was supposed to bring about actually entailed - thus jesus completely wipes out every living being in the universe in order to 'save' them from the utter anguish and suffering of life: salvation through death. (No afterlife! That'd be cheating!) Taav would be left behind though, and in the end it would be revealed that -he- was the -actual- second coming of christ, for it was -him- who was the catalyst for the final judgement, so at the end you have a scene where taav is hanging from an ephemeral cross, in the completely abandoned wasteland of what was once his former home planet. Y'know, i'd actually consider buying that book. Alternatively, if you're less into the gloomy bad-ending type of stories, you could make the guys use jesus' powers to resurrect lenin and usher in a new age of universal communism, having the human race live in prosperity and peace till the Big Crunch resets the whole thing and restarts the drama once more! _______________ Find out more about the Jedi Academy Aurochs here and more about Masta here! Married to Kain. This comment was edited by Masta on May 01 2008 08:43pm. |
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Tallepyon - Student 
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The Aurochs should be the common enemy in your stories. They are certainly the common enemy of my day to day struggles! |
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SaZ - Student 
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Quote: a common enemy: 666, and a number of smaller factions.
well you did not put any details about this enemy yet, but it sounds pretty silly to me. even for a fantasy story id recommend using something that is a little more... lets say threatening than some '666' which is obviously a group of worshipers, fanatics etc. of devil, satan or any kind of evil 'god'.. ofcourse it is unclear how serious this whole thing you gonna make. take Goa'uld from SG-1 series for a example. while in its simplest form its a war of egyptian gods versus humans, then ofcourse we have flying pyramids and the fact that those gods are actually aliens *cough*... well basically idea sounds silly , but in fact its very well done. _______________ playing jk3 since 30th of january (2005), member since 1st of february. [Unofficial Master to Vision and Z�diac ] If you can make a fool of yourself infront of 300 people you can do anything - Jaiko D'kana |
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